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The maiden, pretty maiden
She sits on her rock.
Combing her hair and
Letting tears drop.

Softly, sweetly, calmly,
Crying the tears of an ocean,
The foam on the waves.
But mostly for your amusement
For all she wanted
Was for you to see.

Did it ever occur to you,
Your actions have consequences
And nothing means something,
Oh what did she do?

Darkly, lovely, wonderful:
Crying the tears of an ocean
The foam on the waves.
But mostly for your enjoyment
As nothing can save her from
Such sweet pain.

If you had loved her,
If you had seen her:
Perhaps you could save her.
Or, at least,
Join her.

T'was the beginning of an ending
You said you never lied:
But what have you done?
And what – will you do – if she dies?

She's still crying, still hiding
From the tears of an ocean,
The foam on the waves.
For your amusement you push
Her further,
But what would you do if she dies?
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flamingbutterflies Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2011
I love it, it has a certain rhythm, calm and profoundness to it
but one error, you spelt combing wrong^you spelt it coming, unless you meant that?
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AhhTheHorror Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2011  Student General Artist
*Discreetly changes*
Nooo I never made that mistake. Of course I proof-read, how could you suggest otherwise?
:L
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flamingbutterflies Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2011
ahah my pardon i must have read wrong :P
*chuckles* good job though
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AhhTheHorror Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2011  Student General Artist
Hehe thanks :] xx
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FirmAsRock Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2011
I love this one. I see it as a woman making herself beautiful, making herself attractive, expressing herself emotionally and the reaction of others towards her and the consequences of those reactions. It is really well done and thought provoking.
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AhhTheHorror Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2011  Student General Artist
Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed it. :)
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FirmAsRock Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2011
Welcome. :D
Hey, could you answer the note I sent please. It's getting close to the end of the month.
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AhhTheHorror Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2011  Student General Artist
Sozzy wozzy! I is busying (eh?) 'n stuff bled.

I'm also in taking the piss out of chavs mode... Hmm...
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FirmAsRock Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2011
You do it so well.
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AhhTheHorror Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2011  Student General Artist
Innit tho? I is well ard bled, in da hood and all.
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